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Post by Nik on Mar 2, 2010 10:37:23 GMT 12
Rissa, we haven't talked much lately D:
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Post by nacho5111 on Mar 2, 2010 15:49:00 GMT 12
Not the place, Nik.
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Post by Caitlyn on Mar 24, 2010 23:01:31 GMT 12
Yeah, I wanna learn more about this thread :3 Can you please repost it?
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Post by Brock on Mar 25, 2010 8:20:46 GMT 12
Something about mars?
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Post by Allie on Mar 25, 2010 13:08:56 GMT 12
Williekins, repost. D<
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Post by kite on Apr 3, 2010 3:37:12 GMT 12
Sorry didnt notice you guys askin for repost A long time ago the gods sealed the doors between their 5 worlds Earth, Fire, Water, Air, and in between the worlds, Darkness (or demon world). The demon world was sealed away because of its destructive inhabitants. For centuries that world has accumulated Great anger at the other worlds for they’re betrayal. One day a 7 year old boy found a glass key (master key) while taking a walk through the park he accidentally opened a door to the world of Air, He considered it to be his own imaginary world in which he could have fun with the air people. Once he was told there were other worlds he seeked out the gates to the worlds exploring them and having fun. 4 years passed and he had finally arrived at the gate of the demon world. Not one world had known what was behind the final gate because it was sealed off for centuries. But, The demons never forgot the treachery of the other nations, the cruelty, the sorrow of being locked up for century's, and their Anger and hatred has only made them stronger. The elders advised the Man to not open the gate. But it is human nature to be curious and he ignored their advice opening the door and releasing the ancient anger of the Demon world's people. They flooded the other worlds and were threatening to destroy all civilization and rebuild from the ashes a new nation. The elders forced the man to seal the doors back up. The people managed to hold back the demons while the man sealed the door. Afterwords the elders promoted the man to elder of earth and Split the keys into individual keys which were then divided among the elders. The Demon world’s key was buried somewhere secret. In case anything was to happen the Man made a map to its location, ripped it into 5 peaces and distributed the peaces among elders. Long after the boy died an unknown force has opened the doors and the demons once again roam the worlds in seek of revenge. The worlds are in danger and can no longer hold them back. Sorry also i'm not sure whether this was my rough draft or the real thing but here you go i'm not in the mood to go over it anyhow (Edit) screw it imma re-Check it
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Post by kite on Apr 3, 2010 3:47:33 GMT 12
<_< I'm just saying you used the wrong word. Its like when people mix up their, there, and they're its a silly mistake. Ok i did not notice you posting that. Now i just feel retarded!!! RAWRR
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Post by Caitlyn on Apr 3, 2010 17:21:06 GMT 12
Looks good tbh.
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Post by kite on Apr 4, 2010 0:46:23 GMT 12
Thanks
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Post by Rubix on Apr 4, 2010 10:50:11 GMT 12
I feel there is a lot of room for improvement on it. It is a nice idea but really needs to be worked on. By saying that a 7 year old simply finds a key and accidentally opens a door to another world while walking through the park...it just sounds kind of ridiculous. Background information would be of much help. And when you start talking about the demon gate you seem like you are drifting into an entirely new story. Since when did the 7 year old boy become a man? In the 4 year time skip? He is only 11 then...not exactly a man...so is the man an entirely new character? And who are these elders? It is a good idea, like I said, however much more detail needs to be added in. However that is why it is in the Help section hope my advice helped a bit
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